Unrendered (a first attempt at poetry) Criticisms, please?

Critisism is pretty hard to give on such a beautiful poem. There is one little touch of detail on it in the second paragraph. Did you mean to put "There was no light?" I was just wondering if that was just a spelling error because that part didn't really make too much sence, but thats the only part that had me stumped. Other then that It's perfect. Comes naturally for you. Awesome job....ps you should write more like that because thats work of art.